Michele:

Yesterday's super gaff (spelling United States wrong) meant that the pressure was on for today's email. In general, Michele did a really great job!

Student is showing signs of improvement. While student still has trouble with run-on sentences, there were fewer editing gaffs. Student could benefit from more careful proofreading. We recommend reading the email aloud before hitting post. Remember that professionalism will count later in life.

Without further ado:

1. "Iowa is the first in the nation contest." Now , this is a bolded header. We all make mistakes. An important thing to remember for the future is to reread these bolded headers before you push 'send' to 40 million followers. As a rule it is always worth it to check everything you are publishing to a mass audience.

2. "As one of my most loyal supporters, I wanted to reach out to you first." In this sentence the 'As one of my most loyal supporters' modifies "I", which means you are saying that because you are your own most loyal supporter you are contacting me first. Now that just doesn't make sense.

This is, as always, the tip of the iceberg. Leave your grammar tips in the comments!